Rough cut - part one

The feedback we received for this rough cut:

Following the advice given from the feedback, we tried to change the split screen part and remove the black areas shown on the frame. However, we noticed that because the size of the frame was increased, the audience were able to see the camera shaking, something we were able to hide before due to the reduced size of the screen. This is shown below

 

 

The changes we made based on the feedback: